Beauty and Beast

Navar Crow's picture
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If beauty is in the mind of man,

Then governments are the beast.

Their dominating power over us,

Has created a Madness that's been unleashed.

All mans ancestors were slaves to it,

As are we to it's money today.

We should dedicate our lives,

To finding a better way.

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I think the poem starts out

Naivette's picture
I think the poem starts out really good, but then, as it get's to the middle, it's a little vague to a point where it's just metaphors that have strayed from the topic (if there was one).

Has created a Madness that's been unleashed.

All mans ancestors were slaves to it,
 

I think during this part, it's a little confusing because it goes from "a Madness", to something that man was a slave to? (Forgive me if I get this wrong). I find it confusing, because how is the government dominating? I just don't get what you mean by this XD.
 

As are we to it's money today.

We should dedicate our lives,

To finding a better way.

It goes from being a slave to "something" to finding a better way to do what? I mean, if the poem was clear in what it meant (As in, how does the beauty of man's mind and the beast of a government relate to "being slaves" for the goverment, and being a slave to money?) Oh wait.. I think I just answered my own question about what "finding a better way." means. But the poem, I think, would be easier to understand if it were a little more clear? Other than that, I think this is a great poem :D.

~Sorry if this doesn't make any sense, I'm really not used to critiqueing. T_T

 


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