You look at me with hatred
In your red eyes evil lurks
You'd try to blame anyone
As long as your not the one it hurts
You yell and scream at me
But I can't stand the rage
I can read you like a book sometimes
That only has a single page
Is this hatred more important to you
More important than your smile
I'd beg you to leave, to go
But I've already been gone awhile
You simply can't exist without it
Your Own Madness
You give it to me like a disease
But I won't have it
Your so bent and twisted
Just like a sick joke
Open mind but closed fisted
My heart under the strain, it broke
I'll be glad just to see you leave
Cuz' I can't take it anymore
All that hatred and anger
Has made you rotten to the core
The things you try to use
And make me hate you
But I'm not falling for it
I've got better things to do
Disguising all your fear
Was always your excuse
But mine is not a life
I can allow you to abuse
You simply can't exist without it
Your Own Madness
You bring it on yourself, you're like an addict
You have to have it
Your Own Madness.....
A lot of this reminds me of
A lot of this reminds me of my ex-wife. Not that she hated me, but the anger. I think she was so sure we would end up hating eachother like her parents that she found ways to have fights and be mad- leading to a justification to end it. It is had to explain, but to me this poem explains parts of it well.
In the first stanza, last line and in the 5th stanza 1st line you have your when it should be you're.
I am not sure I like the next to last line the way it is, as it sticks out as longer than the rest and breaks the flow. What about removing the last line and using the second half of the next to last as the end? or maybe just have 5 lines at the end, although I am not a fan of that idea either. Maybe drop the first half of the next to last line.